Here is my HONY draft!
I looked at Kat's and Lekha's drafts.
I had my friend Katie Barton look over my essay. She said I could improve my sentence and paragraph order. I realized that was a problem and she helped me figure out a better system of organization. She said I could add some more analysis to make it stronger, and to add more specific examples from HONY. I agreed with her, and have now implemented them into my essay and I agree that it is a much stronger essay. She was very helpful, and now my essay is better written with a stronger analysis.
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